Revised Ledes

Apparently, our ledes were not written properly. Active voice vs. passive voice, the 5 W's? Professor wants us to rewrite them, correctly. Here they are:

1. A last-quarter scoring spree by Connie Hawkins, the newly arrived forward, enabled the Bullets to erase a seemingly insurmountable 22-point halftime lead by the Warriors in a come-from-behind win, 88-87.

Connie Hawkins, the Warriors newly arrived forward, led his team to a come-from-behind victory against the Bullets, 88-87, with his last-quarter scoring spree after an overwhelmingly 22-point advance by the Bullets. 

2. “The defendant’s crime may not have caused physical harm, but the hardship he inflicted on those who trusted him with their savings cannot be ignored,” said District Judge Marvin Hurley yesterday in sentencing Norris Josephson to a minimum of five years in the state penitentiary on a fraudulent investment scheme that bilked local residents of more than a half million dollars.

At yesterday’s trial, Norris Josephson was sentenced to a minimum of five years in prison on charges of fraudulent investment that bilked local residents of more than a half million dollars. 

3. The weather bureau today offered little hope to corn and wheat growers across a wide belt of Minnesota with a prediction of no rain for the next week to relieve the month-long drought that has cut crops by an estimated 5 percent to date.

The weather bureau predicted Minnesota’s month-long drought to carry on throughout the next week, continuing to harm the production of corn and wheat growth. 

4. F.W. Walkenhorst, a university regent, said at a meeting of the regents today that the teaching staff at the state university works an average of fewer than 20 hours a week and that, unless this is remedied by a larger course load, the state legislature could not be expected to approve the university’s current budget request.

A university regent said the state university’s current budget request could be on the brink of rejection unless the university increasing their course load and teaching hours. 

 

5. The Crested Butte Dam burst last night and a wall of water 12 feet high swept through small towns, farms and ranches in eastern Idaho leaving an unknown number of dead and injured and millions of dollars in destruction.

The Crested Butte Dam burst last night, causing millions of dollars in destruction and an unknown number of dead and injured as the 12-foot high wall of water swept through the small town of eastern Idaho.